Saturday, January 21, 2012

Would YOU keep reading?

Posted by LA Dale
Having re-written the first chapter of The Cupcake Guy, I'd like to know if you're hooked enough to want to keep on reading.....

Chapter 1

“Are you serious?”
“I’m afraid so.”
Looking across the counter at Connor, Olivia swallowed her shock, trying to take control of the hurt that was suddenly raging inside. His round blue eyes were staring at her, filled with the kind of look that told her he couldn’t understand why he’d gone out with such a loser in the first place. There wasn’t a hint of guilt or sadness. 
Olivia sniffed, her blood beginning to boil. How could this have happened? What could she have possibly done this time? She hadn’t mentioned the ‘L’ word.  She hadn’t been needy or clingy. Everything had been going so well. 
After a whirlwind romance that began with their eyes meeting over the organic bananas at the supermarket, Olivia and Connor had gone on six dates in three weeks.  Connor had been the perfect gentleman, in fact so much of a gentleman, that Olivia became a little concerned when he hadn’t put the hard word on her. She was beginning to think he might be secretly gay, one of those poor fellows who couldn’t come out and say it so they went out with untold amounts of girls to prove themselves wrong in their own minds.
Connor had told her he loved her hair and that he liked the fact that she had her own business. He’d complemented her sense of humour and whispered some very dirty little sweet nothings in her ear. And though he’d balked at meeting her mother well, actually picking her up from her mother’s place - they’d had a romantic picnic under the willow tree at Apex Park with a bottle of Moet, for God’s sake. Now he was putting her back onto the reject pile? What had she done?
“Does this have anything to do with last night?” It was the only possible reason he could give. 
Last night had been the first time she and Connor had done the deed. Olivia had been so convinced that he was the one; she hadn’t wanted to have sex until the moment had been exactly right. Having decided that his cooking dinner for her at his place was probably the right time, she’d shaved and plucked her body into submission and even bought a new matching set of lingerie for the occasion.  Connor loved red.  Or so he’d said.
Funnily enough, she’d sensed a certain hesitance on his part after he’d stripped her of her jeans and top. It was as if his whole demeanor changed when he discovered that she wasn’t the kind of girl who looked good in a g-string. Which may also have had something to do with his clamouring to switch out the light. At the time, she’d put it down to nerves, the newness of the relationship. But now, well…?
Connor shifted uncomfortably and looked at his feet.  He couldn’t even meet her eyes. “No, not at all. It’s nothing to do with last night. I don’t think it’s going to work between us, that’s all.”
“Did I suck or something?”
“Of course not.”
She knew she hadn’t.  Olivia had certain skills that had been described as ‘bloody marvellous’ and ‘fucking awesome’ in the past. Unfortunately, they didn’t appear to be enough of a lure for Connor.
“Then why?”
Connor let out a great big sigh. “Look. I just don’t find you that attractive with your clothes off, if you really want to know.”
Olivia’s eyes opened so wide they actually hurt.
“I beg your pardon?”
“You have cellulite, Livvy.  Your bum looks like an unpeeled orange. You don’t look good naked. In fact, you’re way fatter than you lead me to believe.”
Olivia blinked.  She didn’t know whether to be mad or upset or both. What drugs was he on? So she wore slimming jeans and a push-up bra.  Every girl did. And they didn’t change the shape of you that much. It was all marketing hype.
“Is that why we had to have the light off?”
“Partly.”
“What was the rest of the reason?”
“I thought you were a natural blonde. Re-growth is a real turn off for me.”
Oh for God’s sake, nobody was a natural blonde at their age.
“So let me get this straight, you don’t want to go out with me anymore because you feel you’ve been misled?”
“Something like that. Look, Livvy, I’m really sorry.”
“For what? Calling me fat or for the fact that you’re a complete arsehole? Tell me, was all that wining and dining just to get me in the sack?”
“NO!”
Which totally meant it was.
“How many other girls have you picked up in the banana aisle?”
Now he looked sheepish. She’d caught the sleaze bag out. “Only a couple. But listen, I like you - as a person - and I’d be totally willing to go out with you again after you drop ten or so kilos.”
“Oh. My. God.  You creep.  You absolute creep. Get out! Get out now!”
Shoving him towards the exit, Olivia pushed him down the two steps that led to the footpath. She was so tempted to kick his bum on the way out.
“Oh, and Connor?”
He turned back.
“I might be able to lose a few kilos but you’re not going to be able to hide that bald spot by combing hair over it for much longer.”
Olivia went back into the shop, shutting the door in his face. Grabbing her keys, she flipped the sign to ‘Back in 5 minutes’ and bolted down the road to the Maggie’s Bakery.  She was well aware that it was two o’clock in the afternoon, and the lunch trade would have cleaned out her shelves but if Maggie didn’t have any peppermint slice left there was going to be hell to pay.

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